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你好呀，我是来自加拿大的雅思外教Mac。今天，给大家带来一个IELTS雅思大作文的原创范文。
老规矩，以下是正文目录：
1，题目
2，审题
3，高分范文
4，范文朗读
5，范文地道词汇中英对照，包括：
题目改述
观点类大作文高分句型
展示“词汇丰富度”的词汇&短语
展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇&句型
题目：
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It is a natural process of animal species to become extinct (e.g. dinosaurs, dodos, etc). There is no reason why people should stop this from happening. Do you agree or disagree?
审题：
Type 类型: Opinion 观点类雅思大作文 (我的观点：disagree)
Body 1: Impossible to know as to whether extinctions are caused by/ show an opposing view
Body 2: Should stop unless proven to be beneficial
- Model Answer 高分范文 & 范文朗读 -
▲范文音频戳这里▲
Since the dawn of life species have come and gone and is seemingly the natural order of life. As such, some people feel there is little reason for humans to prevent this natural process from occurring, an opinion I disagree with unless it can be proven the demise of a species would be beneficial.
One of the main reasons why humans should protect animals is that we cannot be sure that if an animal species is going extinct, it is because of our actions, or because it is natural. Due to this uncertainty, any extinction may be attributed to human activity, even in part. It can also be argued, however, that since humans are a natural organism, we are also part of the natural order of things. In other words, humans' effect on the Earth is a natural process from which the consequences could be considered as part of the natural evolutionary path of the planet.
This argument, though, is nihilistic for, as a higher species, we should do our utmost to protect all creatures within the animal kingdom. As it is perhaps impossible for us to ever conclude with absolute certainty the specific cause of a species' vanishment, it is incumbent upon us to do our best to ensure a species' survival, for we are also unsure what the consequences are, not just on bio-diversity, but also on ourselves. Unless we can justify non-interference owing to a naturally-endangered creature being a threat to a benign species, or for that matter to ourselves, we should take action to prevent its disappearance.
In conclusion, since it is impossible to confirm as to whether a species extinction is due to human behavior or to ‘the natural process’ of things, and since we should be able to cognize the importance of all creatures, I believe we should do our best to protect all animal species, particularly as we are also unsure of the ramifications on human life, unless it can be shown that a species' extinction is advantageous.
- Essay Analysis 范文解析 -
- (1) Introduction
Paraphrasing from the Statement/Question 题目改述:
natural process of = natural order of
animal species to become extinct = species have come and gone
there is no reason = there is little reason
why people = for humans
stop = prevent
happening = occurring
Standard Phrase for the “Opinion” type essay 观点类大作文高分句型：
some people feel that
, an opinion I disagree with
unless it can be proven
Words showing Cohesion (C&C):
and is seemingly
As such,
for
this
, an opinion
would be
Vocabulary 高分地道词汇和短语：
Since the dawn of life 自从生命出现以来
the natural order of 自然秩序
demise of 伤亡
- (2) Body 1 -
Aspects that must be referred to 这段需要提到：
reason why animals should be protected
Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型：
One of the main reasons why ...is that
Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语：
uncertainty 不确定性
may be attributed to 可能归结于
human activity 人类活动
a natural organism 有机体
are (____) part of 是……的一部分
the natural order of things 事物的自然规律
natural evolutionary path 自然的进化路径
Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：
is that
if
because of_______, or because this…
Due to this (_____),
, even in part
It can also be argued, however, that
since
In other words,
from which the consequences
could be considered as
- (3) Body 2 -
Aspects that must be referred to 这段需要提到：
Should stop unless proven to be beneficial
Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型：
This argument, though,
Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语：
nihilistic 虚无主义的
a higher species 更高级的物种
do our utmost to 尽最大努力
the animal kingdom 动物王国
absolute 绝对的
specific cause 明确的原因
vanishment 消失
incumbent upon 是……义不容辞的责任
bio-diversity 生物多样化
justify 证明……正确/正当/有理
non-interference 不干涉
naturally-endangered 自然濒危的
benign 良性的
Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：
This argument, though,
, as
As
perhaps
, for
consequences are not just on ……, but also on
ourselves
Unless
owing to
being
, or for that matter
- (4) Conclusion -
Standard IELTS essay phrase 雅思高频句型：
In conclusion,
I believe
Vocabulary and Collocations 高分地道词汇和短语：
is impossible to confirm 不可能确定
cognize 认知
the ramifications on 后果
advantageous 有益的
Words Showing Cohesion [Signposting words, conjunctions, relative pronouns] (C&C) 展示“连贯与衔接”的词汇和短语：
, since
, as to whether….is due to, or to
, and since
, particularly as
Also
, unless it can be shown that
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